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PostSubject: BB's Poem   Thu Aug 26, 2010 2:41 pm

okay so this will be my second post. Surprised

This is a poem that I really like that I wrote. I hope that you enjoy. I warn it is somewhat depressing. Razz

Web of Deceit
Trapped in his web of deceit
Body, mind captured by his warped love
Unable to scream, unable to run
Struggling in the threads he wove around me
How can I escape from this trap?
How can I break away from this love?
I hurt and I cry
Desperate to be free
But like a spider, he paralyzes me
My glassy eyes staring, enraptured
Mind captivated by poisonous words
Free me from this web
So I may fly free once more.
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PostSubject: Re: BB's Poem   Thu Aug 26, 2010 3:15 pm

I like this:D.
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PostSubject: Re: BB's Poem   Thu Aug 26, 2010 3:18 pm

FlameWriter wrote:
I like this:D.

Thank you! I worked really hard on this one. Glad it payed off. cheers
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PostSubject: Re: BB's Poem   Fri Aug 27, 2010 12:09 pm

this is good Smile did you base it off an experience of yours?
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PostSubject: Re: BB's Poem   Fri Aug 27, 2010 12:19 pm

No it's actually based on a song and one of the pictures that go with it. If I can find the link again. I'll show it to you.

Here's the song. The picture that inspired me was the one at 0:36. With the girl sitting near the spider web.

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=e5S8yU9e8Mg
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PostSubject: Re: BB's Poem   Fri Aug 27, 2010 12:47 pm

wow good song XD and I love the pictures one inspired me as well! Smile Ill make a topic and post it
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PostSubject: Re: BB's Poem   Fri Aug 27, 2010 12:50 pm

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wow good song XD and I love the pictures one inspired me as well! Smile Ill make a topic and post it

cool. Ya it's a great song and the pictures are amazing. I wrote part of three short stories from them. (if you want I'll post them). And two other poem, but there not near as good. Can i ask which picture inspired you?
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PostSubject: Re: BB's Poem   Fri Aug 27, 2010 12:58 pm

The one of the boy with wings and a sych sitting next to the world Smile ya you should post them
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PostSubject: Re: BB's Poem   Thu Sep 02, 2010 6:31 am

that is a good poem btw, you know you're awsome at writing XD keep it up
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PostSubject: Re: BB's Poem   Thu Sep 02, 2010 2:39 pm

aww, ty so much rams. Very Happy
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PostSubject: Re: BB's Poem   Thu Sep 02, 2010 5:38 pm

hey, i only speak the truth and i love your writing
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PostSubject: Re: BB's Poem   Thu Sep 02, 2010 5:59 pm

haha, my first fan. Very Happy
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PostSubject: Re: BB's Poem   Thu Sep 02, 2010 8:08 pm

yeah!!!! XD
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